Matt Bellamy

This is a very interesting poem. I don't often find poems in such a story form on YWS, so it makes a nice change. When I first read it, I ...

I really like this poem. It's well written and emotional. I just have a few small nit-picks. In the second stanza, I think you should replace the full stop after ...

Hi! I thought this was quite sweet. However, I think it sort of lacks rhythm. Maybe it's because some lines are quite a bit shorter than others, I'm not sure. ...

Hey! I'm not particularly keen on poems about writing, but it is a subject matter we should all be able to relate to. And it is definitely light-hearted and fun, ...

Hello! I really like this. The first stanza sounds a little disjointed because the lines are so short. However, none of the other stanzas have this problem and in the ...

Yay!

Hello! After reading the first couple of lines, I kind of expected this to rhyme. I don't really know why, I was just surprised when it didn't, but it's not ...

Hey! I love Bioshock. Can't wait for the sequel to come out. And because I like it, I could picture everything you were saying - the ice sculptures, men in ...

Hello! I like your concept, but some parts of your poem don't really make sense. I don't know what the first two lines mean, and I think you only said ...

Woah! I love this. It's so different. It has an old-sounding tone, and it's very strong. Kinda creepy, but it's lightened a little by your use of exclamation points. You ...

Hello! I like this poem - it's lighthearted and fun. However, I think some of your words are unneccsary. For example, here: "The bane of a dishwasher, / A dishwasher's ...

Hello! I think you could shorten this. It does drag on just a little. I think you could help this by putting some of the shorter lines together. It sounds ...

Apart from changing "instore" to "in store", I can't find anything wrong with this. It's adorable! It flows well, the rhyming is good and it ends beautifully. Every line is ...

Hello! I really like this poem. Your rhyming scheme is different and interesting, and I think that's what I like most about it. It's also a bit creepy, especially the ...

I like the changes you have made! The bird simile makes a lot more sense now. Your poem is a little simpler, I think, but it still creates a strong ...